Icypelt

[|I.c.y.p.e.l.t.|]

Name- Icypeltstar

Age- 19 moons old

Gender- She-cat

Personality- Very nice and kind, with an outgoing personality, I'm very brave and strong, I'm aslo feirce in battle and protcetive to my friends and Clan members

Clan- ThunderClan

Position- Warrior

History- As a young apprentice, my parents, Driftingstorm and Gingerflower,died. I sat what from them ever night hoping that they were still alive. Now I'm deputy of TreeClan and happier then ever, but for 13 long moons I still what for there spirits to come... and yet they still do.

[Raggedice]

Erm, I'm sorry. You didn't use the correct bio form, and the RP is not from first person, but from third. Like:

Brambleclaw slipped through the bracken, wincing as the thorns scratched at his pelt. Amber eyes flicked from side to side, judging distances and routes. "Ashfur! Thornclaw! It's safe, come on out!" He called over his shoulder. The warrior sighed. His friends were too cautious, in his opinion. They had to toughen up and get bolder if they wanted to survive.

So just change the bio and get rid of the deputy and TreeClan stuff. That's not in the game, or in what you're signing up to do. But also, welcome to WTC2!